Thinking
*
He looks up from his work, dropping his pen
on the table. He drinks ice-cold water from a cup.
His eyes move down to his chest; a thought! He unbuttons
his shirt. It’s already hot. Beads of sweat are like coins
on the skin, shining in the morning sun. They snake
down the surface, cooling him. Maybe
he will leave his house today. Outside, the bees
are already active, full of life. The thought of it snakes
through his mind; he’d rather stay in his pen.
But he keeps thinking. Again, he raises the cup
and feels the refreshing coldness. It buttons
his mind for a moment, and his thoughts drop like coins
*
on the tiled kitchen floor. The coins
gaze back, their expressions as empty as his cup;
as blank as that sheet of paper. The pen
thrives on actions, not thinking. Be
patient! Those thoughts will become words, snake-like
lines. It’s still hot. His mind is a misplaced button
*
for a shirt, simply lost. Buttons
seem to have a habit of that. The buzzing bees
mock him with their productivity, yet the pen
will not create. The faucet is tempting, like a snake
he once read about. His mind is wandering again; the coins
lay there on the floor. He pays them no mind. The cup
*
is empty still. O! How he longs for it to be full again, the cup
on the table, and the one in his head. Being
thirsty is quite an ordeal. He imagines a coin-filled
fountain, sparkling with water and wishes. The pen
is waiting. He remembers the heat, but he buttons
his shirt regardless. Thoughts snake
*
through his mind, and the sweat no longer snakes
across his skin. He is thinking. Once again, the cup
is full. He is at the fountain, casting his coins
away. The floor is bare, as it should be.
Nothing is empty, order is restored. Buttons
are accounted for. He reaches for the pen.
*
*
B. Moretti
Wonderful poem! Who is the author, B Moretti? 🙂
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It’s my nephew. I am so proud of him. Since I have previously highlighted my son here I thought it might be nice to showcase my nephew as well. Talent runs in our family!
Thanks for stopping by.
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But he keeps thinking. Again, he raises the cup
and feels the refreshing coldness. It buttons
his mind for a moment, and his thoughts drop like coins
*
on the tiled kitchen floor. The coins
gaze back, their expressions as empty as his cup
lovely imagery, smart metaphor, thanks for sharing.
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Thanks so much for stopping by and your kind words!
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Wonderful imagery … talent, indeed, runs in the family. Kuddos for him!! \\(^:^)//
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That is so nice of you to say! Glad to be back in the Rally this week…stopped by your site as well…your musical poem had me tapping my toes!
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Superb!
‘Claps’ is all i can give after reading this amazing piece of work..I just simply love it!
Alcina-In need of me-2
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Thank you!
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I actually love this. Surreal and gritty and shifting metaphors…very engaging. Images like sweat coins and bees buzzing around get left behind with a sense of the absurd. Wonderful.
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Thanks for your kind words. He is definitely talented!
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Interesting
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Thanks for stopping by!!
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I absolutely love this!
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impressive lines.
keep your talent shining.
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He will appreciate your encouragement! Thank you!
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“How he longs for it to be full again, the cup on the table, and the one in his head. Being thirsty is quite an ordeal.” — This is the kind of thirst that is hard to quench. Oh the emptiness of it all.
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Well said! Thanks for stopping by!
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A wonderful piece of poetry. I loved reading it. Thank you for sharing. Happy Poetry rally!
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i like this, i gotten drawn into the scene as i read. oh… i also quiver unpleasantly at the thought of snakes… i acknowledge them as one of God’s creatures but don’t like to be around them.
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This is a really great piece. I love how it jumps from thoughts to thoughts and gains returns to a full glass at the end! The flow was awesome.
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Wonderful poem. You have such a talented family. 🙂
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Hey thanks for stopping by Rigel! I enjoyed your site as well. You have amazing talent yourself!
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Wow, another of our grandsons with inspiring writing ability! We are so proud!
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Thanks MOM!!!
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Your nephew’s piece is fabulous! Love the way he weaves the same objects through the piece, giving them a different role and emphasis in each stanza. Thanks for sharing this one for the rally!
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Thanks! I am proud of him!
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Enchanting word play. Very nicely done. 🙂
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