Finish Line
Fingertips penetrate the surface
breaking the magic spell
of the water’s
glassy plane
Her slender length
smoothly and fluently
glides into the refreshing
water like a porpoise.
Gracefully she disappears
only to resurface
showing the cheering crowd
her powerful moves.
Determination set about
her delicate jaw
as we watch her
in awe of her strength.
The length of the pool
her racetrack
the wall
her finish line
Her mind alert
as her body moves
to the victor
goes the ribbon.
The crowd erupts
she is far ahead
her hand reaches out
switching off the alarm.
Up and out of bed
She knows that
today is the day
to make her dreams come true.
poetryroad 
I like to meet her
great poem
Thanks
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My inspiration is my daughter! She is an amazing sister and an even more amazing person! Big things for her! Thanks for the kind words!
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powerful,
love the twist in the end, creatively beautiful entry.
Happy Rally.
🙂
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Thanks, the twist was a change at the last minute…the best kind!
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love it. will and power of streangh
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Awesomely done. You had me leaning forward watching the race, then made me smile at the end. Bravo!
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A very optimistic tone, where the narrator seems ceaseless until victory encircles her…
Amazing theme!
Wonderful!
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love your imagery, i feel like i’m watching her swim (:
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I sensed the athlete’s resolve. Nicely put together, just the right words and tension.
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Ah, so positive! Wonderful/
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Best
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Best way to win a race!
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So easy to see the image you have drawn
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Always seeing visions of the goal and dreams you wish to attain.. they will then cone true. Such power in visions.
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loved it …great poem well written and a credit to your daughter …..thank you for sharing
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thanks so much!!!
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This reminds me so much of my niece … an avid swimmer and competitor from a tike throughout college. When the water gets in their blood – nothing seems to deter them from the finish line. Very nicely knitted together. Thank you for sharing. Also, appreciate your visit.
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simple and powerful piece poetry..
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Well done, reminded me of my younger sister’s days on the swim team. Favorite lines for some reason are
“the wall
her finish line”
Also like the twist at the end.
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Wrapped up sooooooo nicely, love it!
Take care
Marinela
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Format works well, words flow easily, imagery is strong. I was a swimmer, and this poem is just so… alive! Well done.
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The water imagery speaks to me, especially the way you describe the stillness of the glassy surface,only to have it broken. Very nice piece of work!
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What a powerful and wonderful transition! I do love a bit of O’Henry!
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Strong–captures it–made me want to swim!
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Vivid imagery I was there with her the whole race. Love the little twist at the end too
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Amazing show you have put across here.. And the alarm made me wake up from the show that you created in front of me!
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Thanks so much for your kind words!
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you can see the picture of this competitor with your words. great job!
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A very beautiful poem that encourages the embracing of empowerment! Loved it! My niece is a swimmer too! Love rallying the kids to reach their potential!
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A very beautiful poem that encourages the embracing of empowerment! Loved it! My niece is a swimmer too! Love rallying the kids in their endeavors to reach their potential!
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Invite you to write for week 5 challenge,
Hope all is well.
Thanks for the attention.
Appreciate your input.
Cheers.
it is always cool to read you, keep it up.
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I applaud you on this one, brilliant indeed, reminds me of my best friend, lol, Thank you, much appreciated, WS
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Thanks! I like it when my work brings back old memories!
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