Petals dangling
Threatening to join
the others below
already shed by time
Fallen
to the cool, black granite
Their edges showing signs
of age
Their stay in the crystal
expiring soon
Once fragrant,
the precious blooms wither
The clock ticks
simple symbol
of nature
that brings such joy
Soon the vase will
lose its guests
For now, though, we wait
for every last petal
to fall…
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Thank you so much!
I nominate Becca Givens
http://beccagivens.wordpress.com/2011/08/22/happy-tastebuds-sing/
A dazzling night
so perfect to see
Pale colors that sing
to me!
http://promisingpoetsparkinglot.blogspot.com/2011/08/perfect-poets-award-for-poets-rally.html
love the imagery,
simply words, powerful impacts/thoughts.
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Thanks!
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you did well.. glad to make my way here.. my thursday contribution.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2011/08/04/strength-of-faith/
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I’m always sad when the blooms begin to lose their luster then fall. Very well done! I enjoyed reading this!
My poem this week: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/25/she-sat-alone-2/
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I love fresh flowers – and I try to keep them perky as long as I can … it is sad when the vase lose its guest !
Nicely done ~~
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Thank you so much for the nomination and recognition!! 🙂 I appreciate your visit to my blog ~~
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Very Nice Poetry with an amazing Imagination
Great Work of Creativity !!
It was indeed enjoyable after reading this one !!
Anyways, Take a look some of my Poetry Collections …
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/category/talent-underground/poetry-zone/
some of my Haiku Collections
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/category/creative-challenges/the-haiku-challenge/
and also, on my very recent Work as well
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/2011/08/15/india-of-my-dream/
!!! Happy Rally !!!
Cheers !!
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Just checked out your site…you are crazy talented! Thanks for stopping by and the nice words! Appreciated! India of my dream my favorite!
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Nice host it is…. Just a suggestion, did you mean..”lose” ?
This is creatively done…Happy day ~
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I did mean “lose” thanks for bringing that to my attention and your kind words!
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Like this! “soon the vase will loose its guests” – great line!
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nothing lives forever, but the memory lives on.. 🙂 beautiful poem! happy rally!
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wonderful writing. a beauty withered, but you have expressed it so beautifully and gently here.
thanks for the visit to my blog. 🙂
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There’s musical beauty to this. It evoked in my mind some fuzzy memory of a song called “Night of Silence” by Daniel Kantor, in which the songwriter was playing with another melody and set of words to go with and be able to be sung simultaneously with the classic “Silent Night.”
Checking the lyrics, I see the thematic connection the loss of flowers as the year moves in its cycle toward the cold seasons of the year, yours being a bit earlier than the song’s, but the feel seems similar to me, as in the lyrics to the first verse of the song:
“. Cold are the people, Winter of life, We tremble in shadows this cold endless night, Frozen in the snow lie roses sleeping, Flowers that will echo the sunrise, Fire of hope is our only warmth, Weary, its flame will be dying soon.”
I was glad to see you had commented on my blog, and that it made me think to read you again. I recalled liking your poem “Finish Line” about the swimmer, and figured I could look forward to another good read from you, which this was. Thank you for it.
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I appreciate the kind words so much by all of you. I stopped by your sites as well and was in awe of all the talent this Rally!
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“Hosting Beauty” – very nice. It reminds me of the impermanence of beauty –
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Thanks. That is a good reference.
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nice imagery of time…
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this is moving — waiting for the last petal to fall. but know what — they will all make a sweet potpourri 😉
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Embracing every moment is all we can do! Lovely piece!
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it’s all about waiting.
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That was smile inducing and thought provoking. Thank you!
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elegant talent…
love the whole work.
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Thanks so much!
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Wonderful poem, simple, yet so touching!
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Thank you for visiting my blog and thank you for an evocative poem!
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Flowers inspire even at their end– nice!
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Such power and pain and potential in your words. My heart moves, and my soul smiles, thank you. 🙂
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